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Editor's Roundup: November 2022

11/30/2022

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​What’s discussed in this post

  • Farther vs. further
  • Unphased vs. unfazed
  • Breech vs. breach
  • Self-editing tips
  • ​Further reading

Farther vs. further

Of the three listed, further and farther is the most common correction I make. While they have similar definitions, The Chicago Manual of Style indicates that further and farther should be used in distinct ways.

Further is for metaphorical distance.
That couldn’t be further from my mind.
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Farther is for literal or physical distance.
She ran farther than me.

Unphased vs. unfazed

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I usually see this when an author is trying to describe a character being unaffected:
She was unphased by his comment.

However, to phase means to schedule or perform a plan or task in stages, and to faze means to disturb or disconcert. 
Therefore, the correct word to describe a character being “unaffected,” is unfazed.
She was unfazed by his comment.

​Breech vs. breach

Typically, an author mixes up these verbs when they’re describing breaking through a perimeter:
They breeched the border.

However, breech doesn’t have a verb form according to Merriam-Webster. It is a noun meaning the buttocks.

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At thirty-seven weeks, the baby was in a breech position.

The verb form of breach means to break open or break through. Therefore, breach is the correct homophone to use.

They breached the border. ​

Self-editing tips

When dealing with homophones and near-homophones, we need to look at both the words’ meanings and the context to determine which word to use.

One way to do this is to highlight the word, right-click, and look up synonyms. If none of the synonyms match the meaning of the word, you're probably using the wrong homophone. However, in the case of further and farther, this way would not be reliable because the first definition of further is farther (English is so fun).
 
So if you have MS Word, a second way to do this is to add the MerriamFetch macro. This is my favorite way to verify spelling and word choice because you can set it up with a keyboard shortcut so that Merriam-Webster is a keystroke away at all times.
Here is where you can find the MerriamFetch macro by Paul Beverley.

Lastly, if you know what homophones you confuse, make a reference chart!

Further reading

Instagram, @itssarahhawkinsedits, “Is it I have further to go or I have farther to go?” 
The Chicago Manual of Style, “5.250 Good Usage versus common usage.”
Editing Macros by Paul Beverley
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October Editor's Roundup: Commas

10/28/2022

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What’s discussed in this post

  • Commas with a direct address in dialogue
  • Commas with an indirect quotation within the question
  • Commas with relative clauses
  • Self-editing tips
  • Self-editing tips

​Commas with a direct address in dialogue

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This is also known as a vocative expression. It's when one character directly addresses another character in dialogue, whether it be by name, nickname, a term of endearment, or another title, the address is set off by a comma or a pair of commas.
If the direct address comes at the beginning of the sentence, the comma goes after the expression:
“Duke, you need to stop talking.”

If the direct address comes in the middle of the sentence, the expression is set off by a pair of commas:

“C’mon, Addy, let’s go to the park!”

If the direct address comes at the end of the sentence, a comma goes before the expression:

“Go home, Martin!”

Commas with an indirect quotation within the question

In their latest manuscripts, a couple of my clients used a construction within dialogue that involved a character questioning what another character said. For example:

“What do you mean Lola ate all the cheese?” she said.

This kind of question can be styled in two different ways:



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1. A subordinate clause with a direct quotation – In this case, you'll put a comma between the subordinate clause What do you mean and the independent clause Lola ate all the cheese, and you’ll add single quotations around the independent clause.

​“What do you mean, ‘Lola ate all the cheese?’ ” she said.
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A dependent clause followed by an indirect quotation – This utilizes the scheme of elision, which is when you omit or drop words that are easily understood by the reader. In this case, the omitted word is by. When you utilize elision, a comma replaces the omitted word. 

​“What do you mean by Lola ate all the cheese?” she said.                 
“What do you mean, Lola ate all the cheese?” she said.

In either case, commas are needed between the subordinate interrogative What do you mean and the independent clause. Which style is up to you, but aesthetics should be a consideration. In the manuscripts I edited, I chose the indirect-quotation style because the direct-quotation style looked busy.

Commas with relative clauses

Relative clauses are dependent clauses that begin with relative pronouns. Who, which, what, and that are the most commonly used relative pronouns. Whether or not you need to set off a relative clause with a comma depends on whether the clause is restrictive or nonrestrictive.

Restrictive clauses include information that is essential to the meaning of the sentence. They should not be set off with a comma or pair of commas.

The woman who lives upstairs needs to soundproof her bedroom a little more.

Nonrestrictive clauses include information that is not essential to the meaning of the sentence. They should be set off with a comma or pair of commas.

Janet, who is my upstairs neighbor, needs to soundproof her bedroom a little more.

Self-editing tips

As an author, it’s sometimes hard to be objective enough to determine if a piece of information is essential to the meaning of the sentence. After all, if it wasn’t necessary, you wouldn’t have written it!

I find it helpful to think of nonrestrictive/restrictive this way:


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Is it identifying? Then it is restrictive. Do not set it off with a comma.
Is it commenting? Then it is nonrestrictive and should be set off with a comma or pair of commas.

Many proofreading and editing softwares will pick up on vocative expressions and introductory subordinate clauses and will suggest a comma or pair of commas, so use those to your advantage. Always keep in mind that a comma is required between an introductory subordinate (dependent) clause and an independent clause, and vocative expressions should always be set off with a comma or pair of commas. Otherwise, your reader will trip over the sentence, and they’ll be pulled out of the manuscript.

Further reading

The Chicago Manual of Style 5.56: Relative pronouns defined
The Chicago Manual of Style 6.24: Commas with introductory dependent clauses
The Chicago Manual of Style 6.53: Commas with direct address
The Chicago Manual of Style 6.54: Commas to indicate elision
Comma Table
Comma Series
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